The second chapter of my fan-novel, Our Day in Disdain, is finished! (self.MLPLounge)
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This is a MLP fan-novel I've been working on for over a year and a half. It's been in production for the better part of a year and I am finally happy enough with the story to start the writing process. The story is considered "Grimdark" and "Sad" according to the fandom's jargon, but it's also going to have it's fair share of happy, suspenseful, heartwarming, and bittersweet moments; so the genre tags shouldn't be what turns you away from the story. Please, enjoy!
Chapter 1: A Groan of Tedium
Chapter 2: A Mare Called Dashie
Criticism is always appreciated, but nothing destructive please. Also, please be aware that there are a few pieces of criticism I'm not willing to take:
I'm aware that the rarity's line in chapter one about being "up to her horseshoes in work" sounds awkward, but there are no other horse puns I can make that sound as phonetically good as 'horseshoes' does.
The name of the main character, Dashie, will not be changed.
other than that, it's fair game. Criticize away!
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